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His visage had turned absolutely pale, something Rhonin would never have imagined of the stalwart warrior.

She seemed in as good a shape as either of her companions

The wizard knew exactly where they were, even despite the darkness surrounding them.

Nekros and his men would have no chance even of defending from within the mountain

Where would even an Orc get a mad idea like that?

From our being here.

Bracing himself so that the wind would not blow him off the edge.

Could not obscure the fact that dawn fast approached

“Whatever is to happen, it has begun.”

The wagons were flanked at beginning and end by armed warriors wielding freshly honed axes, swords, or pikes.

Each orc traveled as if prepared to face the enemy at any given second, for word of the supposed invasion  from the west had reached even the lowest of the low.

Erecting a wagon capable of bearing a dragon would have been impossible, and so it had fallen to Nekros himself to take control of the two senior beasts.

He who would bring victory to his people would surely be acclaimed ruler

They seemed everywhere

The dragon diving towards him had scales the color of fire, not darkness.

He pulled out what looked to be a tiny whistle

Better trying that than trying to sprout wings.

It appeared he would have to try

And into a sight they had not at all expected

In one hand that gleamed bright despite the clouds

He turned from the scene, not wishing to see so determined a creature perish-and suddenly saw yet another massive form dive from the clouds, this one a nightmare in black.

Red the dragons would be that hatched, but, under the dark one’s fostering, they would become as sinister a force as he.

Surely Nekros did not think this ailing dragon any match for the younger, more virile Deathwing?

The bitter mage recalled noticing it when the elf and Falstad had tried rescuing him from the orcs.

The medallion suddenly flared, spreading a vermillion light over the astonished spellcaster

Almost immediately, a different, rocky landscape materialized around him, a barren place that had seen too many battles and now, in the distance, witnessed another.

HE found himself staring into the eye of a fallen giant, the same red, draconic giant the human had seen plummet from the skies but minutes earlier.